Characters look great!

Characters look great!

Perfect.

Perfect.

Hair holding is a really nice detail.

Hair holding is a really nice detail.

I think Timi should just nod his head here instead of speaking. Let the visuals talk sometimes.

I think Timi should just nod his head here instead of speaking. Let the visuals talk sometimes.

She shouldn't call Jubril here. He's close so he can see when she extends it to him.

She shouldn't call Jubril here. He's close so he can see when she extends it to him.

Let's separate the panels here and use full pages for each one. It's nice to have a visual "pause" where he just turns back. Also, no need for him to say "I've changed my mind". Turning his back kind of implies it. So maybe he says "Pass it" instead.

Let's separate the panels here and use full pages for each one. It's nice to have a visual "pause" where he just turns back. Also, no need for him to say "I've changed my mind". Turning his back kind of implies it. So maybe he says "Pass it" instead.

Let's change it to "How should I smoke". His body reaction should be more chill. This feels a little aggressive.

Let's change it to "How should I smoke". His body reaction should be more chill. This feels a little aggressive.

This should be broken into 4 panels. Also, we have text for the steps, so let's fill it in. Here, we should use "xray vision". The viewer should be able to visualize holding the smoke in their lungs for a while.

This should be broken into 4 panels. Also, we have text for the steps, so let's fill it in. Here, we should use "xray vision". The viewer should be able to visualize holding the smoke in their lungs for a while.

His body should jerk when he coughs.

His body should jerk when he coughs.

Good.

Good.

There's too much dialogue in this panel. Let's split out "so when do I get high" into another one.

There's too much dialogue in this panel. Let's split out "so when do I get high" into another one.

Let's remove the dialogue here and just keep the amused smile.

Let's remove the dialogue here and just keep the amused smile.

During the explanation, we should illustrate the Endocannabinoid system, not the characters. We want to visualise the system in a true-to-biology but also visually exciting way so that people get it. You'll need to study images on Google.

During the explanation, we should illustrate the Endocannabinoid system, not the characters. We want to visualise the system in a true-to-biology but also visually exciting way so that people get it. You'll need to study images on Google.

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First, this lung illustration should be around panel 7 or so where he smoke properly for the first time. What we should see here is Timi's face in the center of the frame, visibly high. We should split it into two similar frames, one without dialogue (for a pause) and a similar looking one where he just says "Yeah" with a smile. The end.

First, this lung illustration should be around panel 7 or so where he smoke properly for the first time. What we should see here is Timi's face in the center of the frame, visibly high. We should split it into two similar frames, one without dialogue (for a pause) and a similar looking one where he just says "Yeah" with a smile. The end.